08.03.23 Interim 1
Feedback was much more positive compared to before, recommended references are the following:
Slava snow show https://slavasnowshow.com/en/
Tim Walker, Boris Labbe
Comments made:
Feedback from Noc:
To develop our setting more and make things less vague potentially, we could do some world building to really consolidate the idea that clowns in our world have a different role and overall have a better rep so we aren’t tied down by the whole creepy clown thing (which is not something we are interested in pushing too far with our animation) Also lose the connotation that clowns themselves are a joke, bc Meryl and Trinket’s dream is something that is serious and as characters they take it seriously too.
(Also could lean more into the fact that they are two circus performers, since their designs are also not conventionally clown like)
Dan(?) said to not forget that contrast is important so ‘it doesn’t feel like we are just eating a mouthful of sugar’. This has been acknowledged and we will continue to take this general point into consideration.
Ayan said she agreed with this opinion, stating that she ‘likes cute clowns, but she likes cute clowns that aren’t always 100% cute more’
She also raised the idea of potentially showing trinket to be frustrated during the part of the story where she is burnt out. It’s a common emotion to experience when one is tired and in that state. This was useful since while writing the story and concept for these two characters, this fact completely slipped my mind. As a pair, we will definitely explore this idea further.
Our vision for the story is for it to be heart warming with a clear message about acknowledging the difficulties of following one’s dream. I think that is strong enough to stand on its own without the need to add many creepy elements.